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Welly wellly well, gumdrops. I've read all three of the stories, finally right? I apologize I've been to issuesville and it hasn't been a pleasant trip. However enough about me and more to the critique.

Since this critique has to do with writing; something I feel is far more personal than illustrating or any medium for that matter, I will be as honest as possible. Starting with the Pros I feel and know you have a great command not only in your usage of words but in visual description of characters and setting. You are able to put the reader side by side with the characters and that is a hard thing to do when trying to capture the readers attention.

I like the ideas of immortals /gods/super dudes who eventhough have unique powers try to live normal lives. Beings who were"created" unaturally tring to exist in a natural world is very intriguing. It shares similarities with greek myths and comics like the The Watchmen, Sandman, Savage Dragon and on and on. I would like to very much read more of your tales as they come down the pike.

Now I want to get to the cons. You and I share not only Zodiac signs and slight personality traits, but also similar writing styles and trains of thought. I found when reading both; "Drops of Midnight" and "Facility of Immortals" that the use of "introduction" were one of two glarring issues in gravitating forward in the story. What I mean by introduction, is the use of setting the reader up to the description or emotional investment of a character and never staying long for anything further.

I was presented by a wealth of characters that albeit unique and fantastical. I was not able to connect with them because I was wisked away to meet another character and setting altogether.

This leads me into my last con of the day which is contrast. The immortals while being otherwordly and depraved have little to distinguish themselves from one another. They are either hyper decadent, hyper evil or moody and there is little to set the apart from one character to another.

Almost like they are different shades of one ultimate character.

I liked Zion, Whyntir and Carrie. Between those three I wanted to learn more about them. I wasn't allowed to care about anyone else.

Trust me G-Rose I'm no exceptional writer and you can take all of this for a grain of salt. This is just my analysis of the story that I've seen so far.

You have crafted a story that spans generations and is rich in imagery, scope, and emotion.

Such a grand journey must be tempered in gentle pacing for the reader. You have a lot to say and shouldn't rush to say it. Those who share similar traits in the story with one another will be lost in being one homogenized void.

I really enjoyed the "Emerald Heir Saga" and felt you were more comfortable in your style and description of events. I hope to see more of that saga as well.

When you come over again I will let you read my story and trust me my baby opus pales in comparison to your scope and precision of dialogue.

I want to say thank you for letting me read your work I was fascinated by all the stories and it has definitely kept me on my toes into writing from one writer to another. Good stuff.